You must understand that a duvet…
No, that’s not right. The duvet?… Yes. ‘The’ symbolizes importance!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Warm…
Warm. For real?! That’s the best you could come up with? Try something with more oomph!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Genuine and…
Loool genuine? Have you never heard of cheap fakes? Let’s see how “genuine” they feel when you wash them and all the insides move to the ends!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Tender.
A size for every need…
“A size for every need”?? So we are marketing now? It’s like you aren’t even trying!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Tender.
A silent witness to what no else sees…
Sweetheart, its primary role is to COVER! OMG I can’t!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Tender.
A silent witness to what no else knows.
Stained by longing…
Yo, how many times do you see duvets in erotica? You are trying to hard!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Tender.
A silent witness to what no else knows.
Tear stained corners and bunched up edges.
How “original”!
You must understand that the duvet is a curious thing.
Tender.
A silent witness to what no else knows.
Tear stained corners and …
Yeah, now is a good time to Hold CTRL+A then hit backspace!\
Amare Poeta
Outside my mind 
And here I was thinking that this stops happening to us after a few years of writing. Cheers to the drafts that never make it to the end and to the inner critic who is to blame for it all – including the good stuff we actually put out for the world to see/read.
P.S. It was so very clever (and hilarious) of you to capture the actual writing process and the very real dilemma of word choice in writing.
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